Is your prose too “purple”?

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One of my worst habits as a writer is a tendency to write “purple prose.” According to Wikipedia, purple prose is:

[…]text that is so extravagant, ornate, or flowery as to break the flow and draw excessive attention to itself. Purple prose is characterized by the extensive use of adjectives, adverbs, zombie nouns, and metaphors. When it is limited to certain passages, they may be termed purple patches or purple passages, standing out from the rest of the work.

Purple prose is criticized for desaturating the meaning in an author’s text by overusing melodramatic and fanciful descriptions. Though there is no precise rule or absolute definition of what constitutes purple prose, deciding if a text, passage, or complete work has fallen victim is a subjective decision. According to Paul West’s words, “. . .a certain amount of sass to speak up for prose that’s rich, succulent and full of novelty. Purple is [widely seen as] immoral, undemocratic and insincere; at best artsy, at worst the exterminating angel of depravity.”

In everyday English, this means purple prose is over the top writing that puts your readers to sleep, makes them want to gag, or makes them want to murder you in your sleep. It also comes off as pompous and pedantic, like someone trying to act smarter than they really are. The same thing can be said in simpler direct language instead of a shitstorm of unnecessary adjectives, overdone descriptions, verbs-turned-into-nouns, and passive voice (“…is characterized by…” is an example of passive voice).

Purple prose was much more common in the early 20th century and before, and maybe in those days of yore people had more patience and time to actually sit and decipher sentences with multiple clauses and descriptors. But if you’re writing for the average person in the early 21st century, you’d better keep it simple if you don’t want to bore your readers to death.

The Writer’s Diet has a neat test that lets you know if your prose is too overdone. All you do is plug in a sample of your writing, press “analyze,” and ta-da! You get a critique and graph!

Here’s a screenshot of mine.  I used the last article I posted.  I need to work on my use of verbs (the brown line at the top: “Flabby”)  but everything else looks okay (Lean and Trim), at least for that article.

 

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About luckyotter

This blog is my journal. I just choose to share it with the world instead of keeping everything inside my head. I'm a recovering Borderline and have also struggled with Avoidant Personality Disorder. I also have Complex PTSD due to having been the victim of narcissistic abuse for most of my life. I write mostly about narcissism, because I was the child of a narcissistic mother, and then married to a sociopathic malignant narcissist for 20 years. But there's a silver lining too. In some ways they taught me about myself. This blog is about all that. Not all my articles will be about NPD, BPD or other personality disorders or mental conditions. I pretty much write about whatever's on my mind at the moment. So there's something for everyone here. Blogging about stuff is crack for my soul. It's self therapy, and hopefully my insights and observations may help others too.
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7 Responses to Is your prose too “purple”?

  1. Interesting test — I tried out a bunch of different samples of my writing, and it was weird how much the results varied. Some of them were lean and trim, others in heart attack territory!

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  2. Linda Lee says:

    Love this post. 🙂

    I’m reading the latest edition of William Zinsser’s ON WRITING WELL. His book is big on simplifying. In the chapter on punctuation, Zinsser said: “There’s not much to be said about the period except that most writer’s don’t reach it soon enough.” Ha!

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  3. Well… I think your writing is colorful and interesting. You keep me reading….and keep me wide awake. That’s a good thing!

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  5. Wolfgirl says:

    I need to check out that test soon! Haha. I still think I have a problem with overuse of (especially) adjectives; I can’t help it, there are so many adjectives that I love, they’re intriguing, majestic, whimsical, delightful, even sometimes somber or gloomy or even horrifying or nauseating…I’ll stop now.

    One thing I’ve started noticing in my own writing is that I seem to use qualifiers (“really”, “very”, “little”, “pretty”) too often, particularly when I’m writing for children. In the immortal words of E. B. White: “We should all try to do a little better, we should all be very watchful of this rule, for it is a rather important one and we are pretty sure to violate it now and then.”

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    • luckyotter says:

      I can relate. I’m always mindful of how many qualifiers I’m using, and I use way too many if I’m not paying attention. EB White’s advice is good.

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